Thursday, May 10, 2012

Show Not Tell A Raining Day

As I walked outside I saw water pouring down from the sky like a waterfall. Walking to school was a nightmare,  I was shivering cold and soaking wet. “I wished this weather would stop” I thought to myself.


  1. Hey Vivienne,

    What a great paragraph. Even if the image of the rain was not there, I would've been able to tell easily that it was raining. Great way of explaining. Anyways keep up the great work.

    Yours Sincerely,

  2. Hello Vivienne, that was a very good explanation about it being a rainy day. You are a very talented writer. Thank you for sharing your work.

    Keep up the great work, Chante

  3. Hey Vivienne

    What a great paragraph. Even if the photo of the rain pouring wasn't there, I could still imagine what your writing was about. Your a very great writer.
    Keep up the great work!

  4. Hey vivenne

    You have lots of interesting word in your story which makes it cool.

    By jordan

    1. Hi Jordan,
      Thanks for commenting on my blog. You are sharing the love. Can't wait to see your blog!



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